Hippotherapy

Is my grammar ok?...?

Horses are trained and ridden for practical working purposes such as in police work or for controlling herd animals on a ranch. They are also used in competitive sports such as dressage, endurance racing, polo, horse racing, rodeo and many other things. Horses are ridden for therapeutic purposes, too. They can improve human health and emotional development. Horses carried humans before approximately 5000 years. The earliest archeological evidence of horses being ridden was in the military as a chariot and warfare. I ask this, because I'm German... I'll have to talk about Horse riding (Equestrianism)... Thanks... When I have got errors... (or what ever...) please correcting me... pink_eye ^^ We are going to talking about Equestrianism. Equestrianism refers to the skill of riding or driving horses. This broad description includes both uses of horses. This is the first that I will say... And my friend. So I talk about this... but my friend?... About which topic she can talk?

Public Comments

1. It's great, from what I can tell
2. controlling herds of animals
3. excellent, other than 'Horses carried humans before approximately 5000 years' should really read 'It is approximated that humans were riding horses over 5000 years ago.'
4. Your grammar is excellent - I couldn't tell that English was your second language so well done!
5. the only problem "word" came up with was archaeological instead of archeological, but as its a talk nobody would notice, good luck
6. Your English is very, very good! The only area where you've gone a little tiny bit wrong is where you talk about horses carrying humans for 5000 years. That sentence doesn't really make sense. Perhaps 'Horses have been used by humans for at least 5000 years' or 'Apparently, humans have been riding horses for at least 5000 years'? Also the last part where you say about horses being used in warfare. This too is a little bit wrong. The first part of the sentence up to 'military' but I would end the sentence by saying, '....when they were used to pull chariots during wars'. Other than that, it's really good. Much better than my German, anyway! :-)
7. They can assist in improving human... horses carried humans for about 5000 years military pulling chariots and in warfare. Good luck
8. aye looks ok
9. um on the 5th line, i would put "Horses can also be ridden for therapeutic purposes, they can improve human health and promote emotional development." It kinda flows better if you do it that way.
10. Over all it works just fine. Horses are used to control herd animals AND/OR herds of animals. Either can be used in this situation. 'Herd animals' referring to animals that group together in a herd. 'Herds of animals' refers to more than one type of animals in herds. It really is up to you.
11. Here are the changes I would make: such as police work or controlling herd animals on a ranch. They are also used in competitive sports such as dressage, endurance racing, polo, horse racing, and rodeo. Horses are ridden for therapeutic purposes, too. They can improve human health and emotional development. (include a couple of examples) Horses carried humans before approximately 5000 years. The earliest archeological evidence shows horses being being used in the military to pull a chariot or to carry a rider into battle.
12. I will quote those parts needing changes. "horse racing" should be just racing because people know that you are discussing horses. "Horses carried humans before approximately 5000 years. The earliest archeological evidence of horses being ridden was in the military as a chariot and warfare." SHOULD BE CHANGED TO: "Horses have been ridden by humans for approximately (or at least) 5000 years. The earliest archeological evidence was for chariots in the military." IT IS OBVIOUS THAT THE MILITARY INCLUDES WARFARE, so you do not need to say that again (that's called being redundant, or redundancy). I Hope this helps.
13. yes.
14. The first sentence is correct. 'Herd animals' refers to animals that herd. The second sentence is correct. The third and fourth sentences are correct. The fifth and sixth sentences need revising because they are not precisely clear. Horses do carry humans but we tend to say they carry people. Also "...before approximately 5000 years." should either be "for approximately 5000 years" or "since 3000 B.C." For the sixth sentence you should be aware that horses pull chariots and so are separate from them. Main Entry: 1char·i·ot Pronunciation: 'cher-E-&t, 'cha-rE- Function: noun Etymology: Middle English, from Middle French, from Old French, from charrier to transport, from char vehicle, from Latin carrus -- more at CAR 1 : a light four-wheeled pleasure or state carriage 2 : a two-wheeled horse-drawn battle car of ancient times used also in processions and races Personally I would change the structure of those two sentences to say this, " People have been riding horses for at least 5000 years. The earliest archeolgical evidence shows that they were used in warfare for pulling chariots." I suggest your friend talks about a subject he or she knows well. If the subject - equestrianism - was selected by your teacher rather than chosen by you then I am afraid your friend will have to do their own research. I wish you well and hope this helps. Good luck with your talk.
15. Thanks... When I have got errors... (or what ever...) please correcting me ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- instead of please correcting me, you should say: please correct me